Have you ever read a novel and wanted to change something that happened in one of the chapters, or the outcome of the story? If you answered yes to this question, then you are in luck! This is your chance to change something from your novel. Think back to what happened at the end of the story (or a specific section of your novel) and ask yourself these questions when rewriting it:
1.) What would you change about the story?
2.) Why would you change it?
3.) How will the change affect the story?
4.) Will it change the plot of the story drastically?
5.) What questions do you have after changing what happened?
One thing I would change about this book, was the fugitive slave law. The fugitive slave law was made while Harriet was in Philadelphia, and the law states that people are allowed to hunt for runaway slaves even in states that don't allow slavery. I would change this part of the book because it just made it harder for Harriet to save the slaves, because she would have to travel longer. Also, security would be a lot tighter, so Harriet and the slaves she saved would be in more danger. I don't think the plot of the story would change that much, because Harriet would still probably be able to save the slaves and end slavery once and for all.
ReplyDeleteOne thing I would change about the book would be the start of Hariett's life. I would make it so that instead of her being a born slave, she could br a captured slave. A person who has had the sweet taste of freedom but had it taken away. I feel that it would give the book an emotional start. Making this change wouldn't really make a difference in the book because she would still end up with the goal of breaking the chains of slavery.
ReplyDeleteGood job! You put good detail into it. But you could add a bit more. Over all it looks good!! :)
DeleteOne thing that I would change about the book would be the beginning of Harriets life she sould have not have been a slave but have been able to live a free life and finaly get a freedom but if she is still a slave and freedom trai is very sad story and wish that never happend in the world.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that I would like to change is how the whole thig started with Harriet. I wish one of Harriet's ancestors were never captured and maybe Harriet could've been captured when she was very young. The change wouldn't affect a whole lot of story but it still would. The plot of the story won't change drastically because it's not really the key point of the book and she would still be a slae either way.
ReplyDeleteGood job Mike Tyson! Be sure to fix your spelling errors like "thig" which should be "thing" and "slae" should be "slave". Also, I would add more transition words after your periods.
DeleteThere is one thing I would change it at the begging when they say she was born as a slave. Instead of satin that you could say her parents were slaves and she became one and lerned how to be one. I dont think It would effect the story a lot. I don't have any wrist ions for this story.
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ReplyDeleteOne thing I would change about this book (And in history), was the fugitive slave law. The fugitive slave law was made while Harriet was in Philadelphia, and the law states that people are allowed to hunt for runaway slaves even in states that don't allow slavery. I would change this part of the book because it just made it harder for Harriet to save the slaves, because she would have to travel longer. Also, security would be a lot tighter, so Harriet and the slaves she saved would be in more danger. I don't think the plot of the story would change that much, because Harriet would still probably be able to save the slaves and end slavery once and for all.